Todays Question:
How are you going top last years senior video? ...Haha, but really.
How does one get involved in the making of the senior video? I am interested.
On a class note...
How do you determine what how much of the information you play in your head as you come up with an idea, to put in your treatment? That is my biggest challenge.
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Objectives:
•10-15 Minutes Long
•Share viewpoints of a broad spectrum of seniors
•Topics to cover: where they are in life/ school, where they've come, where they are
going, important lessons learned in college,
•Balance speaks to seniors & to families
•Youthful & important
'The Carthage Yearbook'
Its graduation day. Jimmy rolls over in his bed. Music is blasting. "Todays the day man- we finally did it!" His roommate Greg, and best friend since freshman year yells from the room over. An alarm clock buzzes 9:15 a.m. Greg walks into the room, adjusting his tie. "Get up! We have places to be my friend." Jimmy stretches, "Yea, yea I'm getting up- meet you there in minute."
Jimmy sits in silence for a minute reflecting on what is going on. He thinks to himself- is it really over? He gets up to get ready but pauses for a second. He reaches under his bed and pulls out an old hardcover book. He falls back down onto the bed and blows the dust off. "Haven't look at this in awhile". He opens to the first page.
Time warps back to August 28th, 2007. Chapter One: Freshmen Year.
Tears roll down her face as she flashes back through the years. She grasps her son tightly into her arms. Cardboard boxes, a microwave and a jumbo pack of ramen noodles form a tower of freshman necessities outside Denhart Hall, The sun beats down on Campus drive. The car door slams shut, he lets go. "It's time. Don't worry mom, I'll be fine." Jimmy takes a deep breath and a look around. Unfamiliar faces whizzing past. He forms a smirk and mutters to himself, "welcome to college."
(Insert Testimonials on students fondest memories of freshman year)
(Match a few of these memories with a scene including themselves as actors)
(Ex: The Freshman block party, the first 10 swipe sunday, painting the rock)
Time warps forward to October 28th, 2008. Chapter Two: Sophomore Year.
(Insert Testimonials on students fondest memories of sophomore year)
(Match a few of these memories with a scene including themselves as actors)
(Ex: Dorm-life, Jumping off the Kenosha Pier, Library All-nighters)
Time warps forward to October 28th, 2009. Chapter Three: Junior Year.
(Insert Testimonials on students fondest memories of junior year)
(Match a few of these memories with a scene including themselves as actors)
(Ex: Internships, Living on your own, Organizations )
Time warps forward to October 28th, 2010. Chapter Four: Senior Year.
(Insert Testimonials on students fondest memories of senior year)
(Match a few of these memories with a scene including themselves as actors)
(Ex: Senior Thesis, Beer tent at Homecoming, Study Abroad )
Time warps back to present day reality. Jimmy slams the dusty book shut. He throws on his suit and tie ready for the day ahead of him. All the while, he ponders to himself about the memories he just ensued. He smiles and looks ahead. Although the Carthage yearbook is coming to a close he realizes the bright future he has yet to write.
KATY PERRY FINDS A HOME IN SPRINGFIELD
UNEXPECTED TAGLINE:
Protests over a music video with Elmo will keep the pop star off "Sesame Street," but Ms. Perry's fans can see her later this year on "The Simpsons."
The tagline alone makes you wonder, Elmo? Maybe its just the comedic topic but the author phrases it so unexpectedly by putting protest, music video & Elmo in the same sentence.
OFFERS BOTH PERSPECTIVES:
The author maintains an unbiased perspective. She is informational on the situation but doesn't personally scrutinize Sesame Street for choosing not to air the video. She offers Sesame Streets view on Katy Perrys attire and the Simpsons view on Sesame Street. She also includes Saturday Night Live's take on the circumstance as well.
The following link is a copy of an email scam that I received today in my inbox. Typically, I disregard these faulty mass emails but I decided to further investigate this one. How is the writing so powerful that my own friends are believing it? Lets take a look.
UNPROFESSIONAL STYLE:
First of all, by the use of 1,005 explanation marks and extended letters in words- it just looks amateur. There is no professional stamp or format to it whatsoever.
LACK OF CREDIT:
They start off by crediting the whole idea to "a good friend named Pearlas Sandborn". The only thing that they state is that she "really is an attorney" which sounds sketchy in itself. They give no supporting explanation to why we should believe this person in her theory that Bill Gates will pay us 10,000 if we forward an email.
PERSUASIVE LANGUAGE:
I do give her that she does use persuasive language. She plays in the guilt factor when stating "you will repent later if you ignore this". It is almost threatening. She also pokes at the fact that by forwarding an email, what do we really have to lose? Whether the content is true or not, she uses the style of repetition. "This is the law, this is for real" is repeated on more than two occasions.
Todays Question:
A treatment is ultimately pitching a story idea. You showed us several different examples on treatment writing.
Are there treatment styles best suited for certain projects? How do we know the best style of treatment to use for our next assignment?
"For illustrative purposes, imagine an interaction between browser and site that goes something like this: Browser: I don’t allow cookies that store personally identifiable information that could be used to contact me without permission. Site: I do have some cookies to place here, but none do that. Browser: That sounds fine. Come on in."
The writer illustrates the situation out to the reader in a way that one can better understand it. They set it up as a relationship between the Browser and the site, offering an interesting perspective.
